AP Seminar: Including Citations and Modeling Virtual Peer Review
Summary
TLDRThis educational video features Jerry Gonzales and Mrs. Allison Malloy guiding students through the final stages of paper writing. They emphasize the importance of proper citation, grammar, and peer review for enhancing readability and academic integrity. The instructors provide tips on integrating citations as they write, using consistent styles like APA or MLA, and avoiding common grammatical pitfalls. They also discuss the significance of clear communication, avoiding verbosity, and the strategic use of transition words to improve essay flow. The video concludes with advice on peer feedback, adhering to word count limits, and utilizing editing tools for refining the paper.
Takeaways
- 📝 Importance of Citations: The video emphasizes the necessity of citing sources correctly and consistently throughout the paper to avoid losing points on the rubric.
- 🔍 Cite as You Go: Encourages students to cite sources as they write to avoid forgetting which sources were used and where specific information was obtained from.
- 🎯 Rubric Clarity: Explains the grading rubric's criteria for citations, distinguishing between zero, three, and five-point scores based on the accuracy and consistency of citations.
- 📚 Consistency in Citation Styles: Stresses the importance of using either APA or MLA consistently and not mixing the two styles in a single paper.
- 📚 Parenthetical and Narrative Citations: Discusses two methods of citing sources in the text: parenthetically and by integrating the author's name into the narrative.
- 📝 Grammar and Style: Highlights the significance of correct grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure for clear communication and high scores on the rubric.
- ✍️ Writing Elevation: Points out that effective writing can elevate the message of a paper, but warns against overcomplicating language which can detract from the argument.
- 🔍 Peer Review Strategies: Suggests using questions and clarification for effective peer review, rather than generic positive feedback that doesn't provide constructive criticism.
- 📉 Avoiding Wordiness: Advises against unnecessary repetition and the overuse of certain words like 'that' to reduce word count and improve conciseness.
- 📚 Utilizing Tools: Recommends using tools like Hemingway app, Pro Writing Aid, and others for grammar, style, and word count assistance.
- 👂 Reading Out Loud: Suggests reading the paper out loud as a method to catch errors and improve the flow of writing that a computer might not detect.
Q & A
What is the main focus of the video lesson presented in the transcript?
-The main focus of the video lesson is on the finalization of a paper, specifically looking at citations, spelling, grammar, and peer review strategies to improve the readability and overall quality of the paper.
Why is it recommended to cite sources as you write the paper instead of adding them afterward?
-Citing sources as you write helps to avoid forgetting which sources were used or where in the source the information was obtained from, thus preventing potential issues with incomplete or incorrect citations.
What are the consequences of missing citations or not having a work cited page in a paper?
-Missing citations or lacking a work cited page can result in earning zero points for the rubric row that assesses citations, which is avoidable and significantly impacts the paper's score.
What are the differences between earning three or five points for rubric row six?
-Three points are earned if the citations are generally consistent but have some errors, while five points are awarded for accurate and consistently styled citations with very few flaws throughout the paper and no issues with the reference page.
What are some common mistakes students make when it comes to citations and how can they be avoided?
-Common mistakes include inconsistent or uneven citations, poor attributing phrasing, and reliance on URLs instead of proper citations. These can be avoided by adhering to a consistent citation style, integrating author names properly, and using tools like the citation button in academic databases to generate correct citations.
What is the importance of using a variety of citation methods in a paper?
-Using a variety of citation methods, such as parenthetical citations and author integration, demonstrates the mark of an effective writer and helps to avoid monotony in the writing style, making the paper more engaging.
Why is it essential to cite any time you are directly quoting, summarizing, or paraphrasing the work of another author?
-Citing when quoting, summarizing, or paraphrasing ensures proper attribution of the source material, which is crucial for academic integrity and gives credit to the original author's ideas and research.
What is the role of grammar, particularly the use of commas, in ensuring the clarity of a paper?
-Correct grammar, especially the use of commas, helps to clearly communicate ideas by separating clauses, setting off non-essential information, and avoiding grammatical errors that can confuse the reader.
What are some strategies to improve the flow of ideas in a paper?
-Strategies to improve the flow of ideas include using the appropriate transition words to reflect the intention of the writer, ensuring clear topic sentences, and maintaining a logical organization of paragraphs.
How can peer feedback be used effectively to improve a paper?
-Effective peer feedback involves asking questions, seeking clarification, and providing specific and actionable insights tied to the rubric. It should prompt the writer to reflect on their own thinking and make necessary revisions.
What are some common pitfalls students encounter when revising their papers?
-Common pitfalls include trying to do too much by overcomplicating the language, not properly citing sources, and neglecting to address the research question or multiple perspectives. Students should focus on clear communication and adherence to the rubric.
Why is it important to keep the word count within the specified limits?
-Keeping the word count within limits ensures that the paper is concise and focused on the task. Excessive wordiness can lead to a waste of effort and may result in graders not reading beyond the specified limit.
What are some tools or strategies that can help with editing and revising a paper?
-Tools like Expresso, StyleWriter, Hemingway app, and others can help with editing and revising by checking grammar, style, and word count. Additionally, reading the paper out loud can help identify areas that may not sound right or could be improved.
Outlines
📚 Finalizing Paper Details: Citations and Grammar
The video begins with an introduction to a lesson focusing on the final stages of paper writing, specifically addressing the often-overlooked details that can significantly impact a paper's readability. The instructors, Jerry Gonzales and Mrs. Allison Malloy, emphasize the importance of citations and grammar, advising students to complete their first draft before proceeding. They stress the need for proper attribution of sources and adherence to citation conventions, such as APA or MLA, to avoid losing points. The lesson also covers peer review strategies to further enhance the quality of the students' work.
🔍 Understanding Citations and Referencing Styles
This paragraph delves into the specifics of citations, highlighting the common pitfalls students face when not citing as they write, such as forgetting sources or specific page numbers. The instructors provide guidance on how to cite effectively, using a consistent style throughout the paper. They explain the difference between earning zero, three, or five points on the rubric for citations, with zero points being awarded for missing citations or a work cited/bibliography. The paragraph also compares APA and MLA styles, showing how to cite sources in both and encouraging students to use the citation tools available in academic databases to assist with proper citation.
📝 Grammar and Writing Conventions
The focus shifts to grammar and writing conventions, with the instructors discussing the importance of clear and concise writing. They address common grammatical errors, particularly with comma usage, and explain the correct use of commas in various sentence structures. The paragraph also touches on the use of semicolons and the avoidance of comma splices. The instructors provide tips for improving sentence flow and coherence, suggesting the use of transition words to link ideas and elevate the overall quality of the writing.
📉 Rubric Row Analysis: Grammar and Clarity
The instructors analyze the rubric rows related to grammar and clarity, explaining how papers are scored based on the presence of grammatical errors and the organization of the content. They describe the scoring system, where a paper with numerous grammatical issues and poor organization may receive zero points, while a paper that is mostly clear but has minor errors may receive two points. A high-scoring paper, earning three points, is characterized by elevated writing that enhances the message of the paper without being overly complicated or distracting.
📌 Self-Editing and Peer Review Techniques
This paragraph discusses strategies for self-editing and peer review, providing questions to guide students in evaluating their work against the rubric. The instructors advise students to ensure their topic is related to a theme from the stimulus material and to check for explicit references to the stimulus throughout their paper. They also suggest looking at the structure of body paragraphs, the use of evidence, and the presence of a counter-argument. The paragraph concludes with advice on how to effectively use peer feedback to improve the paper, emphasizing the importance of clear communication of ideas.
📝 Final Paper Revision and Submission Tips
The final paragraph offers advice on the final stages of paper revision and submission. The instructors remind students not to wait until the end to write their reference pages and to ensure that the number of references matches those used in the paper. They also discuss the importance of having a clear solution or recommendation in the paper and the need to avoid trying to do too much, which can lead to a lack of clarity. The paragraph includes tips on how to give and receive effective feedback, the importance of staying within the word count, and the use of tools to help with editing and grammar. The instructors conclude by encouraging students to reflect on their work and to continue improving their writing skills.
Mindmap
Keywords
💡Citations
💡Grammar
💡Peer Review
💡Rubric
💡APA and MLA
💡Attribution
💡Paraphrasing
💡Word Count
💡Transitions
💡Editing
💡IWA (Insightful Writing Assignment)
Highlights
Jerry Gonzales and Mrs. Allison Malloy discuss the final touches of their paper focusing on citations, spelling, grammar, and peer review strategies.
Emphasis on completing the first draft before beginning the lesson to properly evaluate the paper.
Importance of citing sources as you write to avoid forgetting crucial information for citations.
Explanation of rubric row six focusing on proper citation and work cited/bibliography to avoid zero points.
Differentiating between three and five points on the rubric based on consistency and accuracy of citations.
Clarification on the use of APA or MLA citation styles and the importance of not mixing them up.
Demonstration of how to cite sources both parenthetically and by integrating author names into the text.
Advising on the use of a citation button in academic databases to generate citations.
Instructions on when to cite, including direct quotes, summarizing, and paraphrasing, with a focus on proper attribution.
Highlighting the difference between summarizing and paraphrasing and the importance of accurate citation.
Rubric row seven focuses on writing conventions, clarity, and the impact of word choice on the paper's message.
Advice on avoiding grammatical errors and bad organization that can lead to a score of zero.
Discussion on the correct use of commas and other punctuation for clarity in writing.
Tips for improving transitions between ideas to enhance the flow of the paper.
The significance of keeping the paper's word count within the specified limit and avoiding unnecessary repetition.
Recommendation to use tools like Hemingway app and other editing software to refine grammar and manage word count.
Advice on how to give and receive effective peer feedback with a focus on questions and clarification.
Encouragement to reflect on one's own work and consider how well ideas are communicated in the paper.
Transcripts
okay everybody welcome back we have a
special treat for you guys today coming
to you live from the Midwest it's both
of us on Jerry Gonzales I teach at Lane
tech college prep and I am with mrs.
Allison Malloy from Carmel High School
in Carmel Indiana we are getting through
the final touches of our paper today
taking a look at some of the more
tedious aspects of finalizing our paper
looking at our citations and our
spelling grammar all of that little
stuff that makes a big difference in the
readability of our paper and then we'll
be taking a final look at some peer
review strategies for you to further
improve your paper so let's take a look
at some of the things that we're gonna
be working on today but before we get
there
please don't continue with this lesson
until you've finished the first complete
draft of your paper it's sort of
difficult to evaluate row six and seven
until you've actually written a draft so
come back and take a look at this once
you are done with the first draft of
your paper and please be sure to check
out the previous videos where we where
we sort of walk you step-by-step on how
to get get to this point so today's
lesson is focusing on attribution of
knowledge adhering to established
conventions and then reflecting and
revisiting revising your own work the
big picture goal for us today is to have
you reflect on your IWA to make sure
that your essay clearly communicates
your ideas as well as the ideas of
others okay so looking at what we're
what we want you to know for today much
of what we're covering today deals with
generally tedious but very important
aspects in writing so citations and
conventions so if you're anything like
my students you probably write your
paper and then try to fill in your
citations and everything afterward after
you're done with everything
and as much as I try to get my students
to get them to site as they go along
many of them put it off until after
they're much further along in the
writing process and this can create some
problems because sometimes students
forget what source they wanted to cite
or they forget specifically where in the
source what page they got the their
quote from and so very important I want
to encourage you to cite as you go okay
so please make sure that you save
yourself some time especially right now
if you're a little bit more crunched for
time or pressed for time that you are
citing as you go along so there's a lot
going on here on this rubric row rubric
row six you can see we have zero three
or five points and so very very
generally four zero points if your
response is largely missing citations
throughout the paper or if you don't
have a work cited or bibliography you're
gonna earn a score of zero points for
that row this is very avoidable okay so
as part of your submission and as part
of us just taking a look over over our
papers just make sure that you are
citing as you go and make sure that
there is a work cited page at the end of
your paper and you'll you can avoid
getting this zero points sometimes you
may be working on a couple of different
documents and your work cited it's not
on the on the document that you turned
in and so that leads you to a score of
zero more common is the distinct
distinguishing what earns you a three or
a five for this row so for for rubric
row six you earn three points if you use
a generally consistent style but if you
have some errors throughout your paper
so some of those errors might be
inconsistent or uneven citations if you
have poor or no attributing phrasing on
clear references or if you are relying
too much on URLs in your work cited page
to really give us where your information
is coming
from and then for five points our work
cited in our bibliographies are accurate
they're consistent in style
very few flaws throughout the paper no
flaws in terms of what the reference
page at the end of your paper looks like
there's really no set way for you to
cite most of you are probably using
either APA or MLA so whatever your
teacher has taught you to use at this
point please continue to use that you
are not penalized for using one or the
other just don't mix them up okay so if
you're using APA make sure you're using
APA if you're using MLA make sure you're
using MLA and you can see on the screen
here that there are many similar and
they're pretty similar there's not much
of a difference in terms of how we use
them it's just a matter of what's being
emphasized here so we have two separate
citations for the same source our
economy and Deaton source here and this
is just a way that it would look in the
reference in the references in an APA
paper or in a work cited in an MLA paper
okay and what I want you to focus on
here at the bottom the the two bullet
points at the bottom here there are two
separate ways that you can reference a
paper or reference a source in your
paper you can do it parenthetically
which is the first bullet point where it
says Kahneman Deaton and then there's
for APA there's common twenty ten or
just Kahneman Deaton or if you choose to
embed and integrate the names of the
author's into the actual body of the
paper you can also do it that way as
well I always encourage my students to
mix it up don't just use one way or
another okay so having a variety is is
is the marker of an effective writer if
you are having some troubles or if you
just want some help with how to actually
generate a citation how to make the
citation on the on Etsuko so if you're
using that school and don't forget you
should be incorporating academic or
from from this database into your paper
there's actually whenever you open up a
source whenever you open up a file from
this database there's always a citation
button on the right hand side that you
can click on and it'll generate a
citation for you in whatever whatever
citation style you're using so in this
case I have pulled up right now I
clicked on citation and then I have my
APA citation here you just have to be
careful to make sure that you are
following the capitalization rules
sometimes it gets thrown off a little
bit but this is definitely a useful tool
for my students so I encourage you to
take a look at this as well or use any
other resources that your teachers have
given you as far as when you should cite
because really this is what the most
important part of this rubric Row is
when you should be citing and what that
ends up looking like so it's it's
there's no such thing as citing too much
okay so you should be citing anytime
that you're directly quoting or any time
that you are summarizing or paraphrasing
the work of another author so these two
things are different it's not the same
so summarizing is a shortened version
shortening a version of what's up what
another source says and incorporating
that into your source versus
paraphrasing is putting on other sources
ideas into your own words you should be
careful though when when you think that
you're paraphrasing you can't just come
up with synonyms for their words and
call it paraphrasing that is still
basically a quote and it should be
treated as such
okay so sometimes my students think that
they're paraphrasing and they're
changing up some of the some of the
words using synonyms using a thesaurus
and when they submitted to turnitin.com
it's still coming up as very similar if
that's the case just use a quote it's
not bad to quote you can over quote but
what we really want you to do is to make
sure that you are
attributing the source okay and as we
said earlier you don't always have to do
it in parentheses whenever you're citing
a source so if you're using attributing
source phrases you can say for example
according to Smith or as Smith notes and
then climate change is argued by Smith
and then just you being consistent with
with the rules of your citation style
and then one way that you can possibly
save some words in case you're pressed
on the word count is to use the phrase
at all so if you look at that bottom
bullet point ET space al it's two
different words when you have more than
two authors so in let's say you have a
source with four different authors
instead of saying Smith Johnson James
and Garcia which you can see it's kind
of a mouthful you can say guard it
should be Smith at all or Garcia at all
okay
so moving on to rubric row seven okay
for rubric row seven were really just
focusing on your conventions okay so
three ways that you should look at it if
the reader reads your paper and if they
found your paper difficult to understand
because of the many grammatical errors
or if because of like a bad organization
this is typically going to lead to a
score of zero if the paper was mostly
clear so if we read your paper if we
read your paper and we get it for the
most part we didn't really get tripped
up on your word choice there weren't
really places where your sentence
structure was getting in the way for the
most part you're gonna get two points
here and then for three points your
phrasing your word choice it actually
elevates the messaging of your paper so
your paper is better because of the way
that it was written versus it
distracting because of it and so the the
the main difference that I want you to
pay attention to is the difference
between the middle column and the high
scoring column
so while both scoring columns you might
have a few errors in grammar and style
the high scoring column has an elevated
writing style that adds to the overall
messaging okay so there are a lot
sometimes you shouldn't use that as like
don't don't try to use words that are
maybe too big or don't try to like over
complicate your your word choice by
trying to elevate it too much because
sometimes it's possible to overdo this
by being too wordy or using phrasing
that's over the top and it actually
detracts from your argument so it is
possible to be doing too much in this
rubric row that actually you actually
end up getting penalized because it was
not as effective as it could have been
all right so I'm gonna pick up here on
the grammar aspect of this and so as an
English teacher and you've only been
hearing this since you were in middle
school because hopefully you had great
middle school English teachers who were
really giving you the emphasis of your
grammar knowledge and but the idea that
commas are important and we should be
using them and that is especially true
when we are trying to be clear in our
presentation of information so when we
think about commas and I just
highlighted obviously there's a ton more
comma rules but these are the most
common ones where we see errors and
issues with punctuation so first of all
if we look use commas after introductory
phrases clauses and words so like for
example for Ornstein her daughter's
obsession so after that phrase then we
would make sure that's an introductory
phrase we would put a comma there the
most important one though use commas to
separate independent clauses when they
are joined by the seven coordinating
conjunctions so probably in middle
school you had a teacher teach you
fanboys I remember very distinctly that
I had a professor in college who said
fanboys was too easy
you should remember it as BAFF nosy
because then no one will ever
but those words are for and nor but or
yet and so those are the only words in
the English language that are strong
enough to combine two independent
clauses with a comma so what you'll
notice there is the word therefore it's
not there so if you have a sentence and
just a reminder an independent clause is
a subject and a verb and it makes sense
and you're trying to connect another
sentence with the words therefore and
just putting a comma that is incorrect
so make sure you only have those fanboys
or bath noisy which ever term you like
better when you are connecting
independent clauses i'm with
coordinating conjunctions use a comma in
the middle to set off words that are
non-essential so likewise there's an
intro and Mulan and Pocahontas arguably
the most resourceful of the bunch and
then we've got that friend use that text
your information therefore it's calming
off don't put a comma after the main
clause when the dependent clause follows
so for most of you what this means is
90% of the time it's probably higher
than that and but for most of you when
you use the word because you like to put
a comma before it and there's no comma
that needs to be there again it's not a
fanboy so there shouldn't be a comma
there so make sure you adjust that as
you can see Peggy Orenstein worries
about her daughter playing Little
Mermaid because no comma needs to be
there and then the one I talked about
earlier with the independent clauses
don't have comma splices a comma splice
is an error when you use a comma instead
of using a period or a semicolon a comma
is not the end-all be-all of punctuation
as some of you like to think it is and I
know some of you are saying well this
isn't necessarily an English class why
two commas matter so much because commas
help you clearly communicate and even at
the college level they expect you to
have a basic understanding of commas and
semicolons and so a semicolon is
interchangeable with a period Mulan and
Pocahontas are really depicted on
princess merchandise that is a complete
sentence object verb makes sense so I
put a semicolon then I have the word
therefore their rustic garb has less
bling potential than that of old school
heroines like
Sleeping Beauty again you do not see a
comma there so at the end of the day
when you're thinking about Grandma how
can I do better with my grammar learn
how to use commas and if you don't know
what that means again and I said it in
the last video but Purdue owl has a
wonderful site where they can give you a
lot of those extra grammar practice and
I'm sure you have an English teacher
that has just been waiting her whole
life or his whole life for someone to
ask about how to use commas and they
will be there for you other things you
can do avoid choppy sentences if your
sentences always start with this or that
adjust those and then I know mr.
Gonzalez is going to talk to you more
about how to fix up those transitions
because that makes a huge difference as
well yeah so I think one of the when
once we actually get the messaging down
for our paper one of the one of the
things that we really want to work on is
making our ideas flow and so sometimes
what my students struggle with the most
is finding the right transition to
reflect what their intention is so many
of my students will for example confuse
the transition although and while and so
that's on this group on the screen right
now what we have here are a bunch of
different transition words that you can
use depending on what your intention is
so if you want to add ideas you can add
a transition at the beginning of at the
beginning of a sentence that says
another or in fact or equally important
and then on and on here these these
types of transitions are made to link
ideas or to show a difference in ideas
so this is these are tools that more
experienced writers are going to utilize
in order to elevate their language to
really jump into that high scoring
column for the final rubric row
all right so when we think about how to
put all of this stuff together because
we just went through both of the rubric
grows and now we're looking at our paper
for what it is we want to start with the
big picture what are those big things we
need to focus on and we want to keep I'd
very closely on that rubric because that
is how we are being scored so if we
drift too far from that it's going to be
problematic so some questions for you to
consider that we came up with together
based on the rubric number one and one
of the most important ones because we
don't want to get that zero is our topic
or question related to a theme from the
stimulus and is this explicit if it's
not explicitly stated that is a problem
okay are you referencing stimulus
material and is it actually used in the
argument it's used in the introduction
don't count that as a use where else is
it used and that is a really big thing
if you're unsure just make a copy of
your document cut that out and then try
to read it was it introduced was it used
do we even notice if it disappears does
your introduction provide enough context
to help prove the significance do we
have sources that tell us why it matters
and then did your thesis specifically
address your question and do you have a
specific position and is that position
debatable as you go through these
questions you're welcome to pause the
slide South Coast
you know self-edit or find a partner and
then go through and really address these
questions if you don't see it clearly
consider it not there
when we then look at outside of that
introduction piece do our body
paragraphs begin with a claim and we've
talked a lot about this in lesson 6 7 &
8 right if you're starting with evidence
you're not necessarily putting enough
voice in your own argument or making
that a point of emphasis so you want to
make sure you adjust that make sure they
start with a claim make sure there's at
least two pieces of evidence does your
analysis connect the claim and evidence
do you have more commentary or analysis
than evidence or description one of the
things we talked about in lesson 8
highlight your evidence that way you can
see what the ratio looks like and if you
have too much um do you have a
counter-argument and if you do did you
offer evidence to establish it and then
disprove it do you have your research
question have you considered it as
you've made that whole argument does it
actually align and is it still true
because if it's not valid anymore or if
it doesn't align that's concerning do
you have multiple perspectives and did
you use relevant and credible evidence
to put those together and to make sure
and again like mr. Gonzalez said at the
beginning don't wait till the end to
write your reference page we're excited
page bibliography because that's how
we're grading and that row of the rubric
anyway based on the use of sources and
what you actually include and then we
get to the end do I have a solution a
recommendation or a conclusion remember
don't be those kids trying to do too
much really no your question no your
goal are you writing a position paper or
a solution paper and then make sure you
fully and plausibly proven it don't try
to take on too much did you properly
cite did a number of references in your
paper match the number of references you
actually use and that's an easy thing
you know just go through your reference
page check off the things that you use
and if you see anything still standing
there then you need to get rid of it
this is not an annotated bibliography
it's not a works consulted it should
just be the ones you've actually used in
your paper and then is it clear what
your wording is versus what the wording
is that comes from other sources and did
you properly attribute
and then at the end of the day none of
this matters if you don't clearly
communicate your ideas and I want to
pick up on one of the things mr.
Gonzalez said because as a greater I
will emphasize the fact that some people
are just trying to do too much you go to
the source you find all these fancy
words you make it sound really really
nice but it says absolutely nothing and
we have no idea what you're talking
about just because you use big words and
a lot of them does not mean you're gonna
score high here it's about a clear
communication of your ideas which
there's that nice balance between making
it not sound like a child wrote it but
also making it understandable so then
when we look at and you may be this way
but I have a lot of students who love to
just get through peer feedback as
quickly as they can and this is the kind
of stuff they do so they write these
evaluative things and they write stuff
that's not gonna hurt anybody's feelings
but really they don't know what they're
saying so that you know introduction
looks good good evidence good job with
your claim right that's all they say
they have they have no depth to it but
then they can check off the box of it
miss Molloy I'm done it looks good and
then when I look at that paper even
though I can't give the feedback I want
to say oh it's it's not good they're
missing there's no reference to the
stimulus here but it doesn't matter
because their peer editor said it looks
good
so what can we do to be better so let's
look at a better example of what
effective feedback actually looks like
so effective feedback actually and I
emphasize a lot of questions and
clarification so I like to think of a
survivor if you've ever watched survivor
Jeff Probst doesn't tell the people that
they're stupid
he just clarifies and repeats the things
that they said and then magically this
light bulb goes off in their head that
proves to them that maybe that was a
dumb decision or maybe that is not
something I should worry about so here
instead of saying looks good right if we
look at that first one where's your
connection to the stimulus the rubric in
tax or in tasks directions say explicit
where's the connection I've asked the
student I've made the student think
about what that looks like then I have
all the stuff in highlight in the next
section you use outside evidence to
provide context right that's not even
you ate if I'm just saying what they did
I'm clarify and then at the end when I
look at their claim it looks like you're
arguing for a solution the use of
virtual cadavers and educating medical
students is that accurate
the goal of effective feedback is to
give the writer food for thought it's
not for you to finish it quickly it's
also not for you to tell them all the
things that you necessarily think are
wrong it's to make them reflect on their
own thinking with staying close and tied
to the actual rubric so that they have
an eye on what they should be taking
away so when we think about tips and how
we can do this better number one and I
just said this it stays tied to the
rubric base your feedback on what the
rubric actually says one of the big
things that we hear in our grade
training all the time and this is good
for you students as well is it's not
what it feels like it's what the rubric
says so look at the rubric and evaluate
based on the rule number two don't infer
meaning if it isn't clear treat it like
it isn't there and for whatever reason
that makes me think of OJ in the glove
right if it doesn't fit you have to
acquit but if it isn't clear it's not
clear we don't know we can't infer and
that is on all of the greater notes when
they go to score is the fact that if we
have to infer any type of meaning just
assume it's not there okay we're not
putting the pieces together if you're
going to convince us you have to do it
be specific and avoid general
evaluations right looks good that
doesn't work there's there's no two
strengths there ask questions really
give the writer something to ponder if
you are the writer be purposeful and
come prepared I love the idea of coming
prepared because it's 2,000 words we
realized that even if you don't have a
lot of things to do right now because
you're quarantined and stuck the thing
that you probably don't want to do all
day is read someone else's two thousand
word essay and so as you're going
through if you can tell them hey I'm
really nervous about alignment between
my claim and my voice then they know
specifically what they're looking at and
they can do a better job of going more
in depth by just focusing on one thing
rather than trying to look at the whole
paper 2,000 words is a lot I totally get
that
we get that and so it's a matter of
saying here's what I don't feel good
about here's where I want your eyes and
then reflect on the feedback not all
feedback is equal and you know this from
being in the classroom right so if a kid
says something and you don't agree with
it make sure you can defend why you
didn't take their feedback and then why
you take the feedback you do because at
the end of the day it's your paper and
you want to score well but you also have
to be receptive to and that feedback in
that criticism but there's a fine line
between the fact that you know more
about your paper and your topic than
they do but at the end of the day if an
outsider can't understand it or if it
doesn't come through we need to really
take that into consideration
okay so a few other points just to think
about as where we would be remiss if we
didn't talk about word count as both of
us know there are some of you that think
2000 words means 3000 and the 1200 word
IRR is going to be 2000 words and so we
want to keep in mind that it's 2,000
words with a 10% overage so we're at
2,200 what's your word count and if
you're telling me right now and you're
in your head to like I don't know you
need to look at it right this excludes
your footnotes your bibliography and any
texts that you have in a visual a graph
chart things like that but make sure you
know your word count if you are over
like and if you are I had a kid one year
at kid you not who was at 2201 and he
was so worried about that one word that
one word is not gonna matter at that
point if they don't read anything past
2200 is one word really gonna be the
difference between you on the rubric
group but if you are over you need to
think about do you have any unnecessary
information should I combine sentences
because a lot of you like to repeat the
same thing that a quote says after you
put it in a quote you then have a
sentence that follows up that's the
exact same sentence so did you say the
same thing twice and the other one that
I noticed is that a lot of you use the
word that because it sounds nice but you
don't necessarily need it so if you file
find the word that that's an easy one to
eliminate for some of you it's 50 to 100
words that you can just get rid of right
away but really keep an eye on word
count because we love you all and we're
going to grade your papers but when they
become excessive all that extra writing
you did is going to be wasted we are not
reading it so you want to really keep
true and like I said earlier college
words not going to give you 2,000 words
if they think you really need 3,000
they're not setting you up to fail they
want to reward you for what you do well
and then we also know that there's a
bunch of free tools that are out there
that can help Express so editing a style
pro writing aid those are ones that
people in my school use I'm big on the
Hemingway app I think it's a great app
but again with all of those remembered
that they're going to be looking at a
specific purpose and so keep in mind
what they're saying but those are easy
ones that can touch up your grammar and
conventions and can help you with word
count as well one other thing
slow and word-count there are programs
where you can actually put text in and
it'll read it out loud to you if you are
unsure of what it sounds like or if
there's a better way to say it listen to
it because in our head we're fixing
errors that a computer is not going to
fix okay so keep those things in mind
and then let's go back and remind
ourselves of where we've been so our
focus for today was to attribute
knowledge correctly to adhere to
conventions and to reflect and revise on
our own thinking so hopefully you're
walking away at the end of this
reflecting on your own
IWA and thinking about how well you
clearly communicate your ideas as well
as the ideas of others and then what you
can do better going forward next steps
please review your paper for citations
and conventions and if you are one of
those people that mr. gonzales is
talking about who haven't actually put
those citations in or done the reference
we're excited because we had a few page
please do it because it's the first
thing your graders are going to look at
and it shouldn't be an afterthought find
a classmate that you can peer review
with and again if you don't look at
anything else look at the stimulus and
see if it's connected and what the use
of is and then work on revising and
improving your paper as always if you
have any device or internet access
issues please reach out to College Board
directly so that they can help you
resolve those because they are committed
to that equity and access peace
and then on behalf of mr. Gonzalez and I
we want to thank you for joining us we
have one lesson left and we look forward
to seeing you there
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