How to Write a Short Film

Tyler Mowery
28 Jun 201922:09

Summary

TLDRThe video script offers a comprehensive guide on writing a short film, debunking common myths and emphasizing the importance of a strong dramatic narrative. It uses the short film 'Stutterer' as a case study to illustrate the process of building characters, establishing philosophical conflicts, and applying Dan Harmon's story circle for structuring a compelling story. The key takeaway is that regardless of length, a well-crafted narrative with relatable characters and a clear conflict is essential for a successful short film.

Takeaways

  • 🎬 Short films are their own unique form and should not be approached with the same mindset as feature films.
  • 🌟 A meaningful and dramatic narrative can be achieved in short films by focusing on fundamental story elements.
  • 🚫 Debunking the myth that short films cannot be deeply meaningful due to their length.
  • 📌 The importance of setup in storytelling, even when working with limited time or pages.
  • 🎥 The misconception that impressive visuals or technical aspects can compensate for a weak story is clarified as incorrect.
  • 🌐 The process of story creation involves starting with a simple idea and building upon it with character development and philosophical conflict.
  • 👤 The main character's beliefs and desires form the core of the story, driving their actions and the narrative.
  • 🔄 The story circle, a tool like Dan Harmon's, can be used effectively for structuring short films by focusing on the natural elements of a dramatic story.
  • 💡 The climax of a story should challenge the character's beliefs and force them to confront their internal and external obstacles.
  • 🎶 The ending of a short film should resonate with the audience by resolving the philosophical conflict and showing character growth.
  • 📚 Analyzing existing successful short films can provide valuable insights into crafting a strong narrative drama.

Q & A

  • What is the main misconception about short films mentioned in the script?

    -The main misconception mentioned is that short films are too short to be deeply meaningful and dramatic. However, the script argues that short films can indeed be meaningful and dramatic if they focus on building them on fundamental story elements.

  • What are the three myths about writing short films debunked in the video?

    -The three myths debunked are: 1) Short films are too short to be deeply meaningful and dramatic, 2) There isn't enough time to set up the story in a short film, and 3) Stunning cinematography, witty dialog, and cool concepts can create a good short film even if the story isn't good.

  • What is the importance of setup in a short film's narrative?

    -Setup is necessary to a story even in a short film. It helps the audience understand what's going on, who the characters are, and why the action is happening. Without a quick establishment of these elements, the audience may disengage from the story.

  • What role does the story play in a short film despite its length?

    -The story is the core element of a short film. Audiences will grow bored quickly if there's no engaging story at the core, regardless of how visually appealing the film might be.

  • Can you explain the concept of 'philosophical conflict' as it relates to the main character, Greenwood?

    -The philosophical conflict refers to the internal struggle within Greenwood's beliefs about his stutter. He believes that his stutter will prevent him from connecting deeply with others and holds him back from forming meaningful relationships. This conflict drives the narrative and engages the audience with the character's journey.

  • What does Greenwood want more than anything else in the story?

    -Greenwood wants to be in a deep, intimate relationship with someone. This desire is what pushes the story forward and sets up the central conflict of the narrative.

  • How does the character of Ellie serve to oppose and challenge Greenwood's beliefs?

    -Ellie holds beliefs that oppose Greenwood's. She accepts herself for who she is and is willing to be open and honest. These beliefs are in direct conflict with Greenwood's, creating tension and driving the story towards resolution.

  • What is the significance of the narrative structure used in the script, and how does it contribute to the story's drama?

    -The narrative structure follows Dan Harmon's story circle, which breaks down the story into fundamental elements that create drama. This structure helps to focus on the character's journey, their desires, the challenges they face, and the transformation they undergo, making the story engaging and emotionally resonant.

  • How does the short film 'Stutterer' conclude, and what philosophical ideas does it confirm?

    -The short film concludes with Greenwood realizing that Ellie is deaf. This revelation shifts Greenwood's beliefs as he learns to accept himself and Ellie for who they are. The film confirms philosophical ideas of self-acceptance, honesty, and risk-taking as the keys to overcoming personal obstacles and forming meaningful connections.

  • What is the role of Greenwood's father in the story, and how does he contribute to the philosophical conflict?

    -Greenwood's father serves as a character who accepts him for who he is, representing a counterpoint to Greenwood's self-doubt. His acceptance adds to the philosophical conflict by showing Greenwood that he is capable of being loved and understood, which challenges his own negative beliefs about his stutter.

  • How does the script use the concept of 'unfamiliar situations' to challenge and develop the main character?

    -The script places Greenwood in unfamiliar situations, such as the prospect of meeting Ellie in person, to challenge his beliefs and force him to confront his fears. These situations are crucial for character development, as they push Greenwood to adapt, change, and ultimately grow.

Outlines

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🎬 Debunking Myths on Short Film Writing

This paragraph addresses common misconceptions about writing short films. It emphasizes that short films, despite their length, can be deeply meaningful and dramatic by focusing on fundamental story elements. The video aims to provide a clear understanding of crafting a strong dramatic narrative in a short film format. It also dispels the belief that short films don't require setup or that stunning visuals and concepts can compensate for a weak story.

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🌟 Building a Strong Character and Conflict

The paragraph discusses the importance of establishing a strong main character and their beliefs to create a compelling story. It uses the example of a short film called 'Stutterer' to illustrate the process of developing a character with a philosophical conflict. The main character, Greenwood, who stutters, is used to demonstrate how a character's beliefs and desires can drive the narrative and engage the audience.

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📌 Structuring the Narrative with Character Development

This section delves into the narrative structure of short films, emphasizing that they can follow the same fundamental story elements as feature films. The video uses Dan Harmon's story circle to structure the short film 'Stutterer', breaking down the story into four quarters and four points to create a dramatic arc. The paragraph explains how the main character Greenwood's journey from his comfort zone to facing an unfamiliar situation, adapting to it, and the consequences of his actions, can be effectively portrayed using this structure.

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🎭 Analyzing the Storytelling Techniques in 'Stutterer'

The paragraph provides an analysis of the short film 'Stutterer', highlighting how the writer and director, Benjamin Cleary, effectively uses storytelling techniques to bring the character Greenwood's journey to life. It discusses the importance of establishing the main character's external problem, the development of the love interest Ellie, and the introduction of the father character to add depth to the philosophical conflict. The paragraph also explores how the film's scenes contribute to the emotional impact and the character's growth.

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💡 Applying Fundamental Story Elements to Various Genres

In the concluding paragraph, the video reiterates the importance of understanding and applying the fundamental elements of story to create a strong narrative, regardless of the story's length or genre. It encourages writers to use the case study of 'Stutterer' as a framework for developing their own stories, emphasizing that a well-structured narrative with a clear philosophical conflict and character development can result in a powerful and resonant short film.

Mindmap

Keywords

💡Short films

Short films are a form of cinematic storytelling that is concise and often focuses on a single idea or theme. They are distinct from feature-length films due to their brevity and the specific challenges they present in terms of narrative structure and character development. In the video, the speaker aims to debunk myths about short films and provide guidance on how to write a strong dramatic narrative within this format.

💡Dramatic narrative

A dramatic narrative refers to a storytelling technique that engages the audience through conflict, character development, and emotional engagement. It is the backbone of most stories, including short films, and involves a character facing challenges or conflicts that they must overcome or learn from. The video emphasizes the importance of creating a strong dramatic narrative in short films to ensure they are meaningful and impactful.

💡Myths

Myths, in the context of the video, refer to common but misguided beliefs about writing short films. The speaker aims to debunk such myths, which include the ideas that short films cannot be deeply meaningful or dramatic due to their length, lack time for story setup, or that they rely on stunning visuals or concepts rather than a solid story.

💡Character development

Character development is the process by which a character in a story changes or grows, often in response to the challenges or conflicts they face. It is a crucial aspect of storytelling, including in short films, as it helps the audience connect with the characters and become invested in their journey. The video emphasizes the importance of understanding a character's beliefs and desires to create a compelling narrative.

💡Philosophical conflict

A philosophical conflict refers to a struggle within a character's beliefs or values, often clashing with the external world or other characters' beliefs. This type of conflict is central to creating a dramatic narrative, as it drives the character's actions and decisions. The video discusses how the main character's internal philosophical conflict about his stutter and self-acceptance is central to the story of 'Stutterer'.

💡Narrative structure

Narrative structure refers to the organization and sequence of events in a story, which helps to create a coherent and engaging narrative. It is particularly important in short films, where the limited time requires efficient storytelling. The video introduces Dan Harmon's story circle as a tool for structuring a short film narrative, emphasizing the fundamental elements of a dramatic story.

💡Zone of comfort

The zone of comfort refers to a state or situation where a character feels safe and is not challenged. In storytelling, characters often start in this zone before being pushed into unfamiliar situations that force them to grow or change. The video discusses how the main character of 'Stutterer' starts in his zone of comfort but is forced out of it by his desire for a deep relationship, leading to personal growth.

💡Unfamiliar situation

An unfamiliar situation is a scenario or context that a character is not used to and that challenges their status quo. It is a critical element in narrative structure as it pushes the character to adapt, grow, or change. In the video, the unfamiliar situation for Greenwood is the prospect of meeting Ellie in person, which forces him to confront his stutter and self-beliefs.

💡Adaptation

Adaptation in a narrative context refers to how a character responds to and copes with the challenges or changes they encounter in the story. It is a key part of character development and is essential in driving the plot forward. The video discusses how Greenwood must adapt to the unfamiliar situation of meeting Ellie, which is central to the progression of the story in 'Stutterer'.

💡Catharsis

Catharsis is a term from ancient Greek drama that refers to the emotional release or purging of emotions, typically those of a tragic or conflicted nature. In the context of storytelling, it is the moment when the conflict is resolved, and the audience experiences relief or a sense of satisfaction. The video emphasizes the importance of catharsis in storytelling, particularly in short films, as it provides a satisfying conclusion to the character's journey.

💡External problem

An external problem is a challenge or obstacle that a character faces in the external world, as opposed to internal conflicts or struggles. It is a key element in storytelling as it creates tension and drives the plot. The video discusses how the main character's external problem, his stutter, is used to explore deeper philosophical beliefs and conflicts.

Highlights

Debunking myths about short film writing, emphasizing that short films can be deeply meaningful and dramatic.

The importance of setup in short films, even when working with limited pages, to ensure audience engagement.

The misconception that stunning cinematography or cool concepts can compensate for a weak story in a short film.

Using the short film 'Stutterer' as an example to illustrate a good writing process for creating a strong dramatic narrative.

The process of finding an idea for a short film, starting with a simple concept and building upon it.

Developing the main character by understanding their beliefs and the philosophical dilemmas they face.

The significance of the character's desire and beliefs in driving the narrative of a short film.

Introducing a love interest character that adds depth to the story and contributes to the philosophical conflict.

Structuring the story using Dan Harmon's story circle, focusing on the fundamental elements of a dramatic story.

Explaining the eight points of the story circle and how they apply to short film narrative structure.

Creating an unfamiliar situation for the character that challenges their deeply held beliefs.

The character's journey of adapting to new situations and the resulting internal conflict.

The importance of a character's actions being challenged and coming at a cost in a drama.

The climax of the story where the character's beliefs are tested and the potential for transformation.

The resolution of the story, where the character returns to a familiar situation, ideally changed by their experiences.

Analyzing the actual implementation of the story elements in 'Stutterer' and how the writer brings these elements together.

The impact of the character's external flaw and internal limiting beliefs on the narrative.

Transcripts

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so you're trying to write a short film

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there's a lot of bad information out

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there about writing short films when

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people want to write movies one of the

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common pieces of advice is watch movies

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but that doesn't really work with short

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films short films are their own breed

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they are written and made for all

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different reasons many times it's for a

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director or cinematographer to show off

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their ability or maybe the short is

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really just an ad for something and

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sometimes the writers seemingly abandon

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what they know about writing dramatic

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narratives when they go to write a short

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film in this video I want to change all

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of that I want to give you a clear

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understanding of how you can write a

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strong dramatic narrative in a short

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film let's begin first off I want to

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debunk a few myths surrounding writing

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short films myth 1 short films are too

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short to be deeply meaningful and

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dramatic this is completely wrong short

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films can absolutely be meaningful and

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dramatic if you focus on building them

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on fundamental story elements myth 2

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there isn't enough time to set up the

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story many writers believe they have to

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skip having any set up in their short

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film

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because they only have a few pages to

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work with this is not true setup is

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necessary to a story even if you start

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right in the middle of the action the

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audience is going to need to know what's

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going on who people are and why the

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action is happening if they don't learn

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these things quickly they will disengage

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from the story myth 3 stunning

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cinematography woody dialog and cool

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concepts will create a good short film

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even if the story isn't good this is

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absolutely wrong yet I see this in short

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films all the time even in a short film

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the story is still the core element

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audiences will always grow bored quickly

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if there's no story at the core even if

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the film looks gorgeous

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however rather than simply showing you

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an example and explaining why that

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example works I want to take a short

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film that already exists and

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reconstructed from the ground up

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like you would be doing when writing

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your short

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the short film I'm going to use is

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stutterer now I want to make it clear

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that I did not make this film this short

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film was written and directed by

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Benjamin Cleary I am using this short

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film to build an example of a good

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process you can adopt to create a short

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film that has a strong dramatic

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narrative stutterer is linked below but

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this might actually work better if

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you've never seen it before also and I'm

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only going to say this once this is not

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the only way to build a story or a short

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film take what's helpful leave what

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isn't this isn't a formula this is an

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examination of why stories work to help

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you write your own story the writer may

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not have used this exact method to build

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this short film however this process is

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one that has been extremely beneficial

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to me and hopefully will be beneficial

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to you as well let's begin with finding

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an idea ideas can be all sorts of things

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they can be a scene a character a line

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of dialogue a concept or a philosophical

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idea that you want to examine for this

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short film let's start with a very

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simple idea the story is about a man who

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stutters this is a good place to start

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we now have a concept we don't have our

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story yet but we have the beginning of

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an idea now we can move on to building

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our main character and what they believe

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just like a longer form story a short

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film needs philosophical ethical or

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moral dilemmas this is why we become

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invested in characters it's not about

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their ability to solve problems or the

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fact that they are in danger it's about

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what the characters believe and the

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actions they take because of those

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beliefs that engage us with the story

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it's good to start by building out the

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main character the person that your

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story will revolve around there may be

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many characters in your story but

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usually there will be one character that

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pushes the story forward more than

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anyone else in this story our main

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character is a man who stutters his name

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is Greenwood Greenwood stutter is an

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external problem but this isn't where

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the conflict of the story is we need to

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give Greenwood some

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Lys what does he believe about his

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stutter that holds him back in life we

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need to answer this question so we can

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begin to build strong story conflict but

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this is hard to figure out without

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knowing what the character once and why

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they want it so let's talk about what

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Greenwood wants Greenwood wants to be in

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love okay this is a start but let's go

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deeper than that

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Greenwood wants a deep intimate

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relationship with someone this is a

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strong desire now that we know what

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Greenwood once we can talk more about

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what he believes what beliefs does

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Greenwood hold that will stop him from

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getting what he wants we have the

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characters want and this major external

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obstacle we can use these together to

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help build out Greenwoods philosophical

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beliefs and the philosophical conflict

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Greenwood believes that his stutter will

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stop him from connecting deeply with

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others he feels disconnected from the

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world and believes his stutter will

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always hold him back he is wallowing in

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self-pity so now we have our central

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character and the central idea behind

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the story these are the guiding ideas of

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almost every great dramatic story a

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character struggling with their own

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beliefs as they come into conflict with

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the world now that we have an

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understanding of what the story is about

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philosophically we can begin building

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the other characters in the story okay

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so this is a love story

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Greenwood wants to find a deep intimate

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relationship so he needs a love interest

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now we bring in Ellie Ellie is green

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with love interest but she can't just be

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the love interest why because that's not

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what the story is about the story falls

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flat if Ellie is simply the love

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interest because then she wouldn't be

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adding to the philosophical conflict

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she should hold beliefs that oppose

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Greenwoods Ellie accepts herself for who

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she is Ellie is willing to be open and

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honest Ellie is not wallowing in

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self-pity these are the beliefs that

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Greenwood must accept

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and now Greenwood and Ellie's beliefs

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are in conflict if this is the case then

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we need to see proof of Ellie's

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acceptance of these ideas Ellie needs to

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have an external problem just like

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Greenwood but we don't know what it is

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yet we'll come back to this now we have

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two major characters but let's add one

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more Greenwoods father Greenwood

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shouldn't have a father in the story for

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no reason this character should also add

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to the philosophical conflict Greenwood

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now has evidence of someone in his life

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that accepts him for who he is this is

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how the father character adds to the

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philosophical conflict so now we have

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our concept our philosophical conflict

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and our characters now we need to think

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about how we can structure a story in a

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way that is dramatic interesting and

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pressures our main character in the best

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way possible let's look at a narrative

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structure short films aren't any more

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difficult to write than feature films

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however some people get confused because

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they try to apply structural formulas

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and rules that only work with

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feature-length screenplays too short

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films as a storyteller and writer you

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should be focusing on the fundamental

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elements of how a story works and that's

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why I want to structure this short film

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using Dan Harmon's story circle the

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story circle is a great tool because it

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isn't constricted by a certain length of

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time rather than existing to hit certain

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beats on certain pages of a feature film

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the story circle focuses on the

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fundamental elements of the story the

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story circle breaks down into four

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quarters and four points which create a

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dramatic story number one the character

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is in a zone of comfort number two but

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they want something number three they

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enter an unfamiliar situation number

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four they adapt to it number five they

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get what they wanted number six they pay

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a heavy price for it number seven they

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return to their familiar situation

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number eight having changed

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I've talked extensively about the story

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circle in my previous videos because I

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believe it is the best structural tool

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for the screenwriter

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because it moves away from screenwriting

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formulas and focuses on the innate

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natural elements of a dramatic story for

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an in-depth look at the different ways

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the story circle can be helpful to a

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screenwriter check out my video on story

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structure linked below so we already

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have the first two points on the story

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circle we have a character Greenwood and

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we know what he wants to be in a deep

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intimate relationship and we also know

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what holds him back his beliefs about

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his stutter now let's look at point

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three we need to place Greenwood into an

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unfamiliar situation this is where Ellie

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fits in the unfamiliar situation needs

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to specifically challenge Greenwoods

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beliefs

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this short film uses the fact that

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Greenwood and Ellie have been chatting

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online for six months and now Ellie is

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in London and wants to meet this is a

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great unfamiliar situation for Greenwood

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to get what he wants it will mean

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confronting his deeply held beliefs this

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is a fantastic dilemma what will

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Greenwood do so now we moved to for

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Greenwood must adapt to this new

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situation now that we know who Greenwood

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is we understand how he would react at

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first he simply doesn't want to respond

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he wants to go on the date yet he

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doesn't want to reveal that he has a

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stutter he wants connection but feels

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completely constricted now let's move to

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five the character gets what they want

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Greenwood should decide to meet this is

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what he wants no matter how scared he is

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he does want this so he takes a chance

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by some chance still want to meet me I'd

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love to meet you

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however at 6:00 Greenwood will pay for

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this one of the biggest important

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elements of a good drama is that

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characters action must be challenged

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characters heading towards what they

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want or getting what they want should

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always come at a cost

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this keeps the conflict heightened and

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the story moving forward so Ellie will

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agree to meet because this is who she is

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she is one who has accepted herself and

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is willing to take a chance however now

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that Ellie has agreed to meet Greenwoods

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walls are going to have to come down he

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won't be able to hide now we go to seven

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return to a familiar situation so this

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is where a lot of people get caught up

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they are confused as to what the return

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is sometimes it can be a little will

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return to a place sometimes it can be a

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return to the balance before the

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conflict began and that's what I want to

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focus on here the return is bringing the

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philosophical conflict to its breaking

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point and reaching catharsis Greenwood

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must go to meet Ellie this is the

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biggest challenge to his beliefs

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if this goes poorly he will retreat back

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into his old beliefs however if it goes

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well then he may become a changed person

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if the goal is to push the drama as hard

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as we can then it must seem like there's

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no way this can go well and then when it

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does go well the audience is relieved

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and experiences catharsis not just

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because a date went well but because the

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philosophical ideas of self-acceptance

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honesty and risk-taking are confirmed by

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the story so now we need to build our

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ending remember when we were building

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the character of Ellie we never gave her

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an external obstacle that she has

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already conquered to show her

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philosophical beliefs so let's do that

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now when Greenwood goes to the date he

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must realize that Ellie is someone who

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has her own problems yet has accepted

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herself and is willing to be honest and

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because this is a love story and we want

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the ending to resonate Ellie's external

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problem should complement Greenwoods

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external problem as if they were made to

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be together

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so if Greenwood can't speak then maybe

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Ellie shouldn't be able to hear and this

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is how this short film builds attending

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Greenwood can't speak but he realizes

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that Ellie is deaf and then at number 8

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Greenwood has changed being honest and

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taking a risk worked in his favor he

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will accept Ellie for who she is and she

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will do the same for him green woods

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beliefs have radically shifted so now we

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have the core of the story but this

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isn't everything

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we haven't actually written it out

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figured out dialogue made stylistic

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choices and so on but this is our

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foundation everything that comes after

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this point will be built on a strong

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foundation because the core elements of

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a dramatic story are here now was this

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easier than what the story building

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process is actually like yes of course

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having the finished product and being

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able to work backwards is always easier

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when ideas come to us they are usually

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messier than this and your story will go

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through multiple drafts however I wanted

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to do this so that you have a framework

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that helps you get through the hard work

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of building the core of your story now

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that we have the core I want to do some

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analysis on how Benjamin Cleary the

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writer and director actually brings

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these elements together hello that can

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you hear me

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so the first thing we see in here is a

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man with a stutter struggling to speak

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on the phone hi my name is Greenwood

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thirty seconds into the short we know

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who our main character is we know his

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name and we know his major external

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problem already from this we can assume

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that his stutter is something that he

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feels holds him back in life then we see

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Greenwood practicing sign language this

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further shows us that his stutter is a

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major element in his life that he wants

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to overcome it also becomes part of his

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character and a bit of setup for the end

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of the story when he finally meets Ellie

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one minute into the short we see

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Greenwood on hold with a company we can

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see that Greenwood fears these

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situations that many people would

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consider easy and that his stutter seems

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to be constantly on his mind thank you

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for holding your call is important to us

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now we go to the scene where Greenwood

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messages back and forth with Ellie again

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this isn't just because Greenwood needs

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a love interest this accomplishes two

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major things one it shows us that Ellie

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and Greenwood have been in an online

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relationship for six months and two it

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shows us that Greenwood wants to be with

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this girl in real life whether he is

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consciously thinking about it or not in

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the next scene we see the Greenwood is a

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typographer which doesn't really add to

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or take away from the core of the story

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it's more of a stylistic choice then we

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go to this snap judgment scene snap

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judgment 1224 which happens a couple

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more times over the course of the short

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these sorts of moments are where you as

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the writer begin to decide how you want

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your story to feel moments like these

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are character moments where we stop and

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learn about Greenwood now we meet

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Greenwoods father Greenwood tells an

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interesting quote to his father the way

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his father reacts after Greenwood

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recites the quote tells us a lot about

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who this man is

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I like that one we see that he accepts

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Greenwood he is not judging him or angry

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with him for having a stutter he simply

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accepts him and like I explained before

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this is his philosophical role in the

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story this also shows that it is not

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enough that Greenwoods father accepts

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Greenwood for who he is

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Greenwood must learn to accept himself

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this is also the first time we sit with

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Greenwood as he says a full sentence

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this scene helps us empathize and

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understand how difficult it can be for

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him to speak mmm

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musics pleasure the human soul it

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experiences from hunting now we enter

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the unfamiliar situation Ellie asks to

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meet in person let's talk about why this

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moment works when Greenwood reads this

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message he gets scared and we get scared

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for him as the audience the fear and the

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audience's mind isn't it's going to be

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hard for him to speak on the date the

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fear in the audience's mind is she won't

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want to be with him after she realizes

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that he has a stutter and those two are

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very different things one is simply

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about an external problem

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the second is about what Greenwood and

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the audience believe do you see the

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difference that difference is everything

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if you don't nail that no one will care

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about your story

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no one will care about simple external

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obstacles they only care about how your

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characters beliefs come into conflict in

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the story so now we go to another scene

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with green woods father talking on the

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phone with a company from the beginning

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this adds to the shame that Greenwood

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feels if he can't even operate as an

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independent person then how can he

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function in a relationship the internal

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voice he uses to judge other people

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exists because he judges himself

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Greenwood decides to follow his current

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beliefs he tries to find a way to skip

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meeting with Ellie okay hey oh sorry

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only getting back to you now amazing

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that you're in London I'd love to meet

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with you but the thing is my bloody

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cousins are visiting and my but then

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Greenwood makes a decision he decides to

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meet with Ellie

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he quickly writes a message and hit Send

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this is his biggest move towards getting

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what he wants eight minutes into the

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short Greenwood tries to break up an

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intense argument between a couple and

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gets beaten up for it this shows us

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another moment of how his stutter holds

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him back in different situations

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now Greenwood does one of his snap

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judgments on himself and in this scene

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he states the philosophical conflict

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that has been at the center for the

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entire story snap judgment 1226

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reclusive typographer invisible to the

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naked eye communication skills in an

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infant Excel was in the art of self-pity

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and then Ellie finally responds and is

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still willing to meet with Greenwood

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which is exactly what Greenwood wants

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and also the scariest thing that could

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happen

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Greenwood prepares for the date this is

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where the short film ties in a scene

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where Greenwood gets beaten listen to

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Greenwoods thoughts she feels like a

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first date I know this is a cosmetic

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surgery oh yes we had a little bit of

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work on Greenwood is still trying to

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cling on to his old beliefs he is still

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trying to think up a convenient lie

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rather than be honest this adds to the

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conflict as Greenwood heads to the date

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and then the climax

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Ellie is deaf which isn't just a reveal

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for the sake of being a reveal this

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reveal has a major impact on the

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philosophical console

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in the story that's what makes the

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reveal impactful Greenwoods external

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problem isn't a problem at all he is

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able to be honest with her about his

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stutter she will accept him for who he

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is and he will do the same for her in

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every scene of this short film Greenwood

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is dealing with his external flaw and

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his internal limiting beliefs sometimes

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that conflict feels big like trying to

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intervene in the couple's argument

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sometimes that conflict feels small like

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Greenwood sitting by himself thinking

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either way Greenwood is constantly being

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pressed by what he believes and how

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those beliefs shape his life this is a

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fantastic short film it has strong

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philosophical conflict good structure

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and an ending that works perfectly while

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this is a case study there's a lot of

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elements that you can apply to stories

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that are not in this genre when you look

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back at the process we covered hopefully

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you can see how these ideas can work

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with all sorts of stories with all sorts

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of lengths and genres and by

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understanding those fundamental elements

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of story you can write your short film

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as a strong narrative drama hello I hope

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