The Best Tips for Writing Your Personal Statement for Residency Plus My Actual Personal Statement!

doctor Lijia
31 May 202220:39

Summary

TLDRDr. Alicia shares her expertise on crafting personal statements for medical school applications, having written many and reviewed over 400. She suggests a four-paragraph format, emphasizing unique backgrounds, specialty choices, significant experiences, and career goals. Her own personal statement, which aided her Stanford residency, is dissected for examples, highlighting the importance of clear communication, positive storytelling, and meticulous grammar. She advises keeping statements concise, relevant, and tailored to specific programs, ensuring a strong impression for residency interviews.

Takeaways

  • 📝 Dr. Alicia shares her experience in writing and evaluating personal statements for scholarships, medical school, and residency.
  • 🔍 Personal statements can show a program your values and future career goals, helping them decide if you're a good fit, but rarely guarantee an interview on their own.
  • 📃 She recommends a format of about four paragraphs, each containing four to seven sentences, with a possible fifth if necessary, and ideally keeping it to one page.
  • 👩‍⚕️ The first paragraph should introduce your background, unique characteristics, values, and reasons for choosing a career in medicine.
  • 🩺 The second paragraph explains why you're choosing a specific specialty, supported by examples from clinical rotations or personal/family experiences.
  • 🌟 The third paragraph is for discussing significant life experiences, such as volunteer or research work, and how they've shaped you as a future doctor.
  • 🔍 The fourth paragraph should outline your career plans, what you're looking for in a residency program, and how you can contribute to it.
  • 📝 Tailor your personal statement to specific programs, but ensure accuracy to avoid mismatches in program expectations.
  • 📚 Examples are crucial; they make your statement memorable and convincing, showing rather than telling your passion for medicine.
  • 🚫 Keep the tone professional; avoid unconventional formats or content that might detract from the seriousness of your application.
  • 🔍 Grammar and spelling are critical; errors can lead to exclusion from interviews, especially for international medical graduates.
  • 👀 Be prepared to discuss any examples or experiences you mention in your personal statement during interviews.

Q & A

  • What is the primary purpose of a personal statement in the context of medical school or residency applications?

    -The primary purpose of a personal statement is to showcase the applicant's values, future career goals, and to help the program decide if the applicant is a good fit based on their values and the program's requirements.

  • How many personal statements has Dr. Alicia estimated to have read in the last year?

    -Dr. Alicia has estimated to have read over 400 personal statements in the last year.

  • What is the recommended format for writing a personal statement according to Dr. Alicia?

    -Dr. Alicia recommends sticking to approximately four paragraphs, each about four to seven sentences long, with the possibility of a fifth paragraph if necessary, and keeping the length to about one page in ERAS.

  • What should the first paragraph of a personal statement introduce about the applicant?

    -The first paragraph should introduce the applicant's background, unique characteristics, values, and reasons for choosing a career in medicine.

  • What should the second paragraph of the personal statement focus on?

    -The second paragraph should explain why the applicant is choosing a specific specialty, backed up with examples from clinical rotations or personal/family experiences with the healthcare system.

  • What is the purpose of the third paragraph in a personal statement?

    -The third paragraph is for expressing what the applicant has learned from significant experiences in life, such as volunteer or research work, and how these experiences have shaped them into the future doctor they aim to be.

  • What should the final paragraph of a personal statement discuss?

    -The final paragraph should discuss the applicant's career plans, what they are looking for in a residency program, what they bring to the program, and their future career goals.

  • Why is it important to keep the personal statement positive, according to Dr. Alicia?

    -Keeping the personal statement positive helps to focus on how the applicant grew from personal difficulties or obstacles, which is more memorable and impressive than simply stating challenges they faced.

  • What is the significance of grammar and spelling in a personal statement?

    -Grammar and spelling are crucial as serious errors can potentially exclude an applicant from an interview, especially for international medical graduates (IMGs).

  • Why should an applicant avoid being 'weird' or unconventional in their personal statement?

    -Being 'weird' or unconventional can detract from the seriousness of the application and may not convey the applicant's suitability for the program, as it can overshadow their personal experiences and goals.

  • What is the importance of tailoring the personal statement to a specific program, and what precaution should be taken?

    -Tailoring the personal statement to a specific program can help personalize the application and show the applicant's interest in the program's specific offerings. However, it is crucial to ensure that the personal statement is addressed to the correct program to avoid confusion or misrepresentation.

Outlines

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📝 Introduction to Personal Statements

Dr. Alicia begins the video by introducing the topic of personal statements, highlighting her experience both in writing and reviewing them. She emphasizes the importance of personal statements in reflecting one's values and career goals, and how they can help programs determine if an applicant is a good fit. She also shares her personal statement that contributed to her acceptance into Stanford for residency in internal medicine. Dr. Alicia clarifies that while personal statements are rarely the sole deciding factor for interviews, they can significantly impact an application if they contain errors or demonstrate poor judgment.

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📋 The Structure of a Personal Statement

Dr. Alicia recommends a four-paragraph structure for personal statements, with each paragraph containing about four to seven sentences. She advises keeping the statement to approximately one page, as shorter statements might not convey enough about the applicant, and longer ones may not be fully read. The first paragraph should introduce the applicant's background and reasons for pursuing medicine. The second paragraph delves into the specific specialty the applicant is interested in, supported by examples from clinical rotations or personal experiences. The third paragraph discusses significant life experiences that shaped the applicant, including any challenges faced and lessons learned. The final paragraph outlines career plans and what the applicant can contribute to a residency program.

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🌟 Crafting a Compelling Personal Statement

Dr. Alicia shares her personal statement from 2014, which she had not reviewed since its submission. Her statement includes her background growing up in a diverse San Francisco neighborhood, her experiences with her mother's health issues, and her passion for internal medicine. She discusses a specific patient case that exemplified the intellectual challenges and rewards of the field. Dr. Alicia's statement also touches on her future goals, including her interest in academic medicine and her desire to become a clinician-educator. She encourages applicants to use personal anecdotes and experiences to make their statements memorable and to keep the tone professional yet authentic.

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🔍 Reflecting on Personal Statement Impact

In this section, Dr. Alicia reflects on her personal statement's effectiveness, noting that it was not perfect but served its purpose in illustrating her values, experiences, and future goals. She acknowledges that personal statements are a way for applicants to express their unique journeys and how they relate to their career aspirations. Dr. Alicia also invites viewers to ask questions about what to include or avoid in their personal statements, emphasizing the importance of sharing anecdotes and maintaining a positive tone throughout the application process.

Mindmap

Keywords

💡Personal Statement

A personal statement is a self-written essay that showcases an individual's background, experiences, and aspirations, often required as part of applications for higher education or professional programs. In the video, Dr. Alicia discusses her experience with personal statements, both in writing them for her own applications and in evaluating them for others, emphasizing their importance in reflecting one's suitability for a medical career.

💡Scholarships

Scholarships are financial awards given to students based on merit or need, which can help fund their education. Dr. Alicia mentions writing personal statements for scholarships, indicating that these essays are a common requirement to demonstrate a candidate's qualifications and potential to contribute to the academic community.

💡Medical School

Medical school is the educational institution where future physicians receive their professional degree. The script refers to Dr. Alicia's personal statements for medical school, highlighting the role of these statements in conveying her passion and qualifications for the field of medicine.

💡Residency

Residency is a period of medical training after medical school where doctors gain practical experience in their chosen specialty. Dr. Alicia shares that her personal statement helped her secure interviews and eventually match at Stanford for her residency in internal medicine.

💡Format

In the context of writing, format refers to the structure and organization of a document. Dr. Alicia recommends a specific format for personal statements, suggesting a concise length and a clear, traditional structure to effectively communicate one's story and goals.

💡Introductory Paragraph

The introductory paragraph of a personal statement sets the tone and provides an overview of the applicant's background and motivation for pursuing a career in medicine. Dr. Alicia advises using the first paragraph to express unique characteristics and values, as she did in her own statement by sharing her upbringing in San Francisco.

💡Specialty

A medical specialty is a specific branch of medicine that a physician chooses to focus on, such as neurology or psychiatry. The script discusses the importance of explaining one's choice of specialty in the personal statement, using examples and experiences to justify this choice.

💡Volunteer Experience

Volunteer experience refers to the time spent working for a cause or organization without compensation, often to gain experience or give back to the community. Dr. Alicia mentions volunteer work as a significant experience that can be included in a personal statement to demonstrate personal growth and commitment to medicine.

💡Career Goals

Career goals are the professional objectives one aims to achieve over time. In the video, Dr. Alicia talks about the final paragraph of a personal statement, where applicants should discuss their future plans, including what they are looking for in a residency program and their long-term aspirations in the medical field.

💡Grammar

Grammar refers to the rules governing the structure of a language. Dr. Alicia stresses the importance of perfect grammar and spelling in personal statements, as errors can detract from the applicant's credibility and may lead to being overlooked for interviews.

💡Metaphor

A metaphor is a figure of speech that compares two unlike things to convey a particular meaning or create a vivid image. The script mentions the use of metaphors in personal statements, such as comparing medicine to playing basketball, but cautions against losing focus on personal experiences.

Highlights

Dr. Alicia shares her top tips for writing an excellent personal statement.

She has experience both writing and reading personal statements, including her own that got her into Stanford.

Personal statements are rarely solely responsible for securing an interview but can demonstrate values and career goals.

A recommended format for a personal statement is approximately four paragraphs, each four to seven sentences long.

The first paragraph should introduce the applicant's background and reasons for choosing medicine.

The second paragraph explains the choice of a specific medical specialty with examples from clinical rotations or personal experiences.

The third paragraph discusses significant life experiences, such as volunteer or research work, and personal growth.

The final paragraph outlines career plans, what the applicant brings to a residency program, and future goals.

Personal statements should be tailored to specific programs but with careful attention to detail to avoid errors.

Examples are crucial for making a personal statement memorable and impactful.

Maintaining a positive tone, even when discussing difficulties or obstacles, is recommended.

Avoid unusual or 'weird' content that might detract from the seriousness of the application.

Grammar and spelling are critical; the statement must be meticulously checked for errors.

Unconventional formats should be avoided in favor of a traditional, clear, and simple structure.

Metaphors can be used in personal statements but should highlight the applicant's personal experiences.

Dr. Alicia shares her personal statement from 2014, providing a real-world example of an effective statement.

Her statement includes her background, experiences with her mother's health, and her passion for internal medicine.

Dr. Alicia's statement concludes with her career aspirations and her desire to become a clinician educator.

Personal statements should be a reflection of the applicant's values, experiences, and how they relate to future goals.

Transcripts

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hi everyone it's dr alicia so today

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we'll be talking about personal

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statements i have been on both sides of

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personal statements at this point having

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written many many personal statements

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for scholarships and getting to med

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school and residency and i've also been

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on the receiving end of personal

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statements having read probably over 400

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personal statements in the last year so

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today i'll be sharing with you my top

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tips for writing an excellent personal

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statement and a specific format you can

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follow that can make the task of

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starting out writing a personal

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statement feel less daunting

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and i'll also be sharing with you my

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personal personal statement that i found

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from when i wrote it back in 2014 that i

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have not really looked at since then and

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i know the title of this video is called

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the personal statement that got me into

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stanford and technically yes this is the

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personal statement that i submitted that

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did help me get interviews and

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eventually i matched at stanford for

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residency and internal medicine

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most of the time though personal

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statements really neither will greatly

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help you or hurt you

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you know they can hurt you if there is

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just a lot of grammatical errors and

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stories that might show like weird

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judgment or something

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and they can help you

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in that they can show the programs like

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your values your future career goals

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and that helps the program decide if you

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are a good fit for them based on their

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values it is rare

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for a personal statement to truly be so

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life-changing groundbreaking that it

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makes

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you get an interview on its own merits

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alone but i have seen it happen

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just a personal statement that shows

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such an extraordinary reflection on

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someone's life that a program director

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decides like i have to meet this person

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so the format that i recommend you

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follow is sticking to approximately

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four

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paragraphs that are each maybe about

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four to seven sentences long

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you can sometimes have a fifth paragraph

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if you have so much to say in one of

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these paragraphs that needs to be split

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into two paragraphs but in general i

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highly highly recommend that you stick

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to approximately

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one page in eras

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you know the reason for this is that if

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it looks like a little bit too short

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like it's only half a page then you

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might stand out for like not expressing

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yourself enough when you had the chance

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to

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and then if it's too long like personal

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statements that are two or three pages

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program directors are probably just not

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going to read past like the first

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page and a paragraph i recommend

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sticking to approximately a page if you

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must maybe like a page and like a couple

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bonus lines if you really can't edit it

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down any further the first paragraph is

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an intro to you

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your background

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and why you chose the career of medicine

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in general

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so this is really a time for you to

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express your unique

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background your unique characteristics

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and values and i'll show you in my

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personal statement which i'll share very

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soon how i did that the second paragraph

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is where you explain why you are

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choosing the specific specialty that you

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are applying to why do you have to be a

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neurosurgeon of out of everything why

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are you choosing to be a psychiatrist

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for example and so the best way to back

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this up is with a lot of examples from

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your clinical rotations or from your own

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personal or family experiences with the

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health care system that can make a

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convincing case for why you are choosing

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this specialty

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the third paragraph is where you can

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express what you've learned from another

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significant experience in your life so

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this can be from

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volunteer experience or research

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experience if you've done extensive

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amounts of volunteer research work

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and how you grew from those experiences

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and how they've shaped you into who you

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are and the future doctor that you're

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going to be

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it can be a chance to talk about more

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clinical examples and what you learn

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from that

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it can also be for people who have red

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flags on their application

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such as failed step exams or

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courses that you had to remediate during

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medical school this is where you would

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explain

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you know the circumstances around how

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you incur those red flag situations and

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what you've learned to grow from them as

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well the final paragraph is where you

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talk about your career plans this is

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where you talk about what you are

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looking for in a residency program

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what you bring to any residency program

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that you go to

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and your future career goals as well

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so

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you can be specific

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if you like to for example if you know

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that you want to be a cardiologist your

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heart is absolutely set on that you can

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mention that in this part of the

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personal statement

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and the good thing is that it is not a

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binding statement you know just because

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you wrote you wanted to be a

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cardiologist does not mean that a few

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years later you're absolutely compelled

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to have to apply for cardiology

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fellowship so you're always allowed to

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change your mind

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if you are not sure it is absolutely

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okay to keep it pretty general what

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programs are doing with this information

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is trying to figure out if you are a

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good fit

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for the program

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and if you are if there's a particular

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track in the program that you might be a

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better fit for

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so for example in internal medicine

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there's

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often times

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a few different tracks including a

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primary care track for people who want

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to mostly go into outpatient medicine

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and then also a categorical track for

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people who want to do inpatient medicine

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or who want to sub-specialize in

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something like gi

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so what you say here might help them

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decide if you are a good fit for

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the categorical versus the primary care

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tract for example

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people oftentimes use this section as

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well to really personalize their

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personal statement and tailor it to a

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specific program that they're applying

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to you can do this if you want for every

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single program you reply to but it is

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very very important that you not double

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check but triple check

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that you are addressing it to the

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correct program so if you're saying you

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know in the last sentence of your

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personal statement

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i believe that john hopkins is

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the best fit for me given

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you know

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this and this reason

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that you are sure that you're actually

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matching that in eras with your

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application for john hopkins and not

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accidentally with like you know the

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university of massachusetts or something

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so making sure that you know if you're

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saying

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um

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you know i'm looking for an academic

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program in an urban area that you're not

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sending that to a program that is in

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like rural michigan

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and is a community program so um you

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know you you can always take out those

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details that maybe don't match with a

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particular

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program that you're sending it to

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otherwise you might wonder

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why

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are you applying to us if you're looking

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for something like very different from

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what we offer so next i'll offer some

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general tips to help you

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so the first thing is that examples are

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everything and it is worthwhile to take

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time to really reflect to make sure that

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you have good anecdotes good examples to

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share in your personal statements

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you can say things like i am excited to

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do medicine but your examples are much

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more likely to

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give off that impression to someone in a

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way that is truly memorable so people

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remember stories keep your personal

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statement positive so oftentimes you

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know we're writing about personal

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difficulties tragedies obstacles

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keep the focus on how you grew from

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those experiences how you overcame those

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obstacles don't be weird

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so what i mean by this is that it is

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okay to be boring i remember

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reading a personal statement from

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someone who

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started off talking about their bowel

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movements and poop and it was honestly

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like

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a really hilarious personal statement

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but it was not necessarily the tone that

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you want for something as serious as a

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you know statement about your future

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career and so you don't have to be

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entertaining it's okay to be boring

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people who write boring personal

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statements get plenty of interviews all

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the time

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and in person you know during your

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interview you then have the opportunity

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to show people that you are engaging

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easy to talk to not boring at all you

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know just be true to the experiences

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that you've had that have led you to

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choosing this career and this specialty

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that you want most importantly grammar

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is everything grammar and spelling are

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so so important make sure it is so

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spell checked grammar checked that it

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all looks really great from that

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perspective

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especially for imgs you know having

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serious grammatical errors will possibly

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exclude you from an interview

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sometimes there can be

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personal statements are very

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unconventional

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non-traditional in the ways that they're

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formatted like i once read a personal

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statement that had like 20 paragraphs

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and each paragraph was only one to two

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sentences so my recommendation is like

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just keep it to like a very very

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traditional format this is not the time

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to like create new forms of literature

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just make it like a very simple clear

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communication

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about

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your experiences and your goals

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as an aside oftentimes people will write

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about

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medicine

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using a metaphor comparing it to

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playing basketball or

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to music

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and that is okay to do but make sure

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that you are still highlighting your own

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personal experiences because sometimes

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people can go so deep into this metaphor

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comparing being a doctor to being kobe

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bryant in the mba that it you can lose

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you know who is the person writing this

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what are their experiences

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besides that they are clearly a big

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basketball fan

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get examples of personal statements from

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friends and classmates that you know

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that matched well and try to get people

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who are the most nitpicky about grammar

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and spelling to read your personal

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statement anything that you talk about

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in your personal statement

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is

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fair game for someone to ask you about

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during the interview as well there's

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like a patient example that you share in

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your personal statement you'll be

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prepared to answer questions from the

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interviewer about like oh what happened

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to that patient or what else did you

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learn finally i'm going to show you my

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personal statement so this is by no

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means perfect

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but i'm being very honest and sharing

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basically exactly what i wrote

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which i had not looked at since i wrote

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it at this point nine years ago so

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yeah let's take a look together i grew

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up in a crowded one-bedroom san

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francisco apartment i shared with four

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family members after we immigrated from

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beijing

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on the streets below me i saw the double

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epidemics of methamphetamine and hiv

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agitating the streets of the tenderloin

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district in the 1990s with daily scenes

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of

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deprivations of the elderly the mentally

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ill and the poor

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these scenes of suffering cultivated in

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me a desire to create a place where

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every individual is cared for

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throughout college in berkeley i strived

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to fulfill this vision by serving as the

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coordinator of a homeless clinic held at

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a women's shelter and as a hiv test

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counselor and trainer of new counselors

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at a free clinic both places that

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delivered health care as a way of

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arriving at human dignity

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so

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i think

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you know in terms of like the objectives

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of that first paragraph where it's about

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an introduction

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and about um

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sharing your background a little bit of

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why you chose medicine i think it does

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do that you know it expresses kind of my

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unique background growing up

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in this particular neighborhood in san

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francisco

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um

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and it i think it also expresses some of

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the values behind why i chose the

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extracurricular activities that i did so

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i'm you know i think i'm okay with that

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you know some people start their

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personal statements with more of like a

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traditional hook where you're like

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in the middle of this action where like

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the plane was about to land

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um but what gave my life its

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professional

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direction was when my mother's

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polycystic kidney disease advanced the

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end-stage renal disease during my time

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in college

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she initially despaired over the burden

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of being bound to her dialysis machine

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every night but over time her medical

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team helped her transform her

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debilitating condition into a practice

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and self-sufficiency

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as she mastered home peritoneal dialysis

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she grew to engage with her health and

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the health care system on a personal

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level from knitting holiday scarves to

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her for her doctors to cooking our

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family nutritious farmer's market beats

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in the past decade since her diagnosis

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of esrd is i advanced in my medical

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training at the same time my expertise

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in participating in her care has

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deepened as well

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from

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translating her medical documents into

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chinese and advocating for her family

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meetings explaining her treatment course

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and helping her make decisions on the

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momentous day of her transplant

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the physicians were most grateful to

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were those whose thorough understanding

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of her disease course was demonstrated

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in their guidance and

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reassurance i think it is very common

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for people to write about

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family health situations

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in their personal statements and you

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know some people may say that that's

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overused

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but you know for me

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my experiences with

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my mom going through her health

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experiences and me being an advocate and

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part of those experiences was like a

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huge part of

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something that helped me decide i wanted

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to go into medicine and internal

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medicine and so i think it's okay to

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share that

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and i think

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i i

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i like the examples i have of um

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her making the scarves and like cooking

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i remember now that she used to do um

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she used to be yeah

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and i think those examples

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really helped make the story maybe a

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little bit more vivid i hope the third

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paragraph my mother's illness experience

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informs how i'd like to navigate my

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relationships with patients

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i found that the kinds of cases i saw on

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inpatient internal medicine most gave me

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butterflies of excitement and i

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remembered most vividly um that seems

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like it's missing a few words but okay

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like it it might not be the

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grammatically the most correct

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one such case was a homeless gentleman

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in his 50s with terrible

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uncontrolled diabetes resulting in

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multiple past episodes of osteomyelitis

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leading to bilateral below the knee

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amputations found to have a recurrence

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of mssa bacteremia

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every moment in this diagnostic mystery

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intrigued me and mattered deeply to the

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patient and me

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where did this infection come from was

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there a potential source that was

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overlooked on exam how would the return

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of the cultures and diagnostic studies

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that the patient and i anticipated

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throughout the day prompt new questions

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or help us find answers

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and what new recommendations would

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consulting infectious disease experts

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yield for us i managed the patient's

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symptoms of pain and delirium joked with

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him about his love for diet snapple once

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his mentation cleared and shared every

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update in the diagnostic work up with

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him the intensity of the discussions

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within our team made me appreciate the

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intellectual passion in teaching and

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learning in academic medicine

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in the end no source was found after an

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extensive evaluation but the patient

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felt better after the careful management

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i was humbled by this example of the

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uncertainties in medicine

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i still remember this patient

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and um now you know thinking

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looking at his conditions this is like

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such a common kind of internal medicine

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type of um

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condition

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and

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i think what i was trying to convey and

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i think this works out is by asking

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those questions i was trying to show

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that like i think i could think like an

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internal medicine doctor but also that

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there was so much like excitement and

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enthusiasm

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for learning and you know resolving

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these kind of these intellectual

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mysteries

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and um

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and also you know i talk about

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everything affecting me and the patients

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and that we're like a team together

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um so i think i'm trying to show

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you know just how

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there was trust and a good therapeutic

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bond between the patients and me

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so yeah i think that's my paragraph

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where i explained basically why i chose

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internal medicine because i focused you

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know my second paragraph on my

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experiences with my mom um there wasn't

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as much room for me to talk about um

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other experiences for example i could

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have talked about like my research

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experiences or other volunteer

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experiences a little bit more as well

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but you know those are kind of

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individual choices that you can make in

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your personal statement

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and then the final paragraph you know

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talking about goals so

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i am drawn to becoming a hospitalist or

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sub-specialist with inpatient

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responsibilities at an academic hospital

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by the intellectual fervor of medical

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teams composed of learners at different

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stages of learning

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so

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um

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that's interesting i didn't remember

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like what exactly i said was my goal at

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that time

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um

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but

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yeah i think this is a good example of

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how you can

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kind of state like what is the setting

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you're interested in and what are your

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like kind of general goals you know here

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i kept it still like kind of open but

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saying like i'm more interested in

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patients

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and

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my interest in academic medicine stems

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from my passion for becoming a clinician

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educator and leader who can eventually

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impart my enthusiasm to the diagnostic

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puzzle to interdisciplinary teams this

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year i am teaching medical students the

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physical exam and helping to design a

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quality

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improvement project regarding

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communication with patients and

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inpatient medicine teams

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these projects reveal the kind of

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educational and systems level pursuits i

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hope to work on as a physician

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so i think that is actually good because

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those are like very typical kind of like

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med ed

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and qi projects that

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you know a lot of people tend to do that

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shows kind of the general direction of

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the career i was aiming for

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my experiences advocating for my mother

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and experiencing the lively intellectual

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nature of internal medicine have led to

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my love for caring for patients in a

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creative process of teaching and

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learning as an internist and clinician

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educator it's a fine you know it's a

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fine personal statement i wouldn't say

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that it's like amazing

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but

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i think it kind of represents one way of

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of how you can um

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explain your values your experiences and

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how you know they relate to your future

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goals

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so i hope that it's helpful to see

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specific examples out there

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because i know for me when i saw

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specific examples of

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other people's personal statements

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when i was in pre-med i was like oh this

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helps me so much to know like generally

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what

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you know an example of one would look

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like so that i can kind of get over my

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writer's block a little bit yeah please

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feel free to ask any questions about

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what to include what not to include

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what's a good anecdote to share in your

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personal statements you know in the

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